Looking forward to having a copy of the whole thing, then. Also, idk if we're supposed to empathize with this gal or not, but some of the jokes about dating here really almost needed a trigger warning. 😂 A little *too* close to home.
Well I like her! This scene is just so specifically "how it feels to meet up with your girlfriends over drinks and talk about the latest crazy guy in your DMs or whatever" that I couldn't tell if you were poking fun a little. Guess that just means it's true to life storytelling.
I like her too. She's ambitious. She moves to the big city because she has big dreams. She's a bit naïve, but who isn't at that age?
I wanted it to feel exactly like girlfriends talking over drinks. Could I make that into poetry, without sacrificing the colloquialism, the speech and the setting? My longer stuff usually has to do with archaic things. I want to see if I can write something modern.
Thank you as always MaryAnne! I've been loving the painting side of you that's come out on Substack. I side I didn't know existed! They're simple and beautiful.
I'm hoping there's a starring role in a snuff film in Madysyn's future. Honestly, girl works my last nerve.
Reads well, Robert. Good social commentary in the well handled dialogue.
Thank you Peter.
She annoys me too, at times. Other times I can't help but admire her.
Novel when? The dialogue writing + scene setting is great. Though the poetry makes it extra fun, of course.
Whenever it gets done, it's gonna be a novel in verse. The poetry is what makes it extra fun to write, too!
Looking forward to having a copy of the whole thing, then. Also, idk if we're supposed to empathize with this gal or not, but some of the jokes about dating here really almost needed a trigger warning. 😂 A little *too* close to home.
I hope readers empathize with her. I don't think it's a satire or anything like that. I think of it like a modern retelling of Troilus and Cresyde.
Well I like her! This scene is just so specifically "how it feels to meet up with your girlfriends over drinks and talk about the latest crazy guy in your DMs or whatever" that I couldn't tell if you were poking fun a little. Guess that just means it's true to life storytelling.
I like her too. She's ambitious. She moves to the big city because she has big dreams. She's a bit naïve, but who isn't at that age?
I wanted it to feel exactly like girlfriends talking over drinks. Could I make that into poetry, without sacrificing the colloquialism, the speech and the setting? My longer stuff usually has to do with archaic things. I want to see if I can write something modern.
A very engaging read
Thank you as always MaryAnne! I've been loving the painting side of you that's come out on Substack. I side I didn't know existed! They're simple and beautiful.
Thank you
This is seriously good. The language is intensely lyrical but never feels artificial, and completely appropriate to the setting
Thank you Barsley. That's very encouraging to hear. That's exactly the tightrope I'm trying to walk.